This is a very rough cut of my work so far. I still need to add some more diegetic sound and transitions. I would also like to spend more time editing to neaten it up.
Sexy... The film! Not your sister.. Not that your sister is ugly! I'll shut up now.
The shots were good. I liked the cutting with the speaker. Thge tap and the distortion are good as they add a feel to the To improve, after adding more,i'd suggest making some cuts between shots smoother, possibly by adding cross dissolves.
Great use of establishing shots to set the scene! I like the use of non-diagetics as it sets an eerie atmosphere. This beginning has a lot of promise, and I would like to know where it's going! The quick match on action shots are also used to good effect, and the shot between the stair banisters could reflect a jail cell, and hint towards the character's mental condition.
the drip noise works really well and you put it all together really well, but i think you shopuld involve the speakers in it more as its not really in it at all even though the film is about them, well done :)
I liked your use of establishing shots at the beginning and the speaker shots. The tap noise was very effective as well. I would maybe cut down the first shot of the bedroom just a little as it seems a little too long, but other than that timing was done well.
Sexy... The film! Not your sister.. Not that your sister is ugly! I'll shut up now.
ReplyDeleteThe shots were good. I liked the cutting with the speaker. Thge tap and the distortion are good as they add a feel to the
To improve, after adding more,i'd suggest making some cuts between shots smoother, possibly by adding cross dissolves.
Great use of establishing shots to set the scene! I like the use of non-diagetics as it sets an eerie atmosphere. This beginning has a lot of promise, and I would like to know where it's going! The quick match on action shots are also used to good effect, and the shot between the stair banisters could reflect a jail cell, and hint towards the character's mental condition.
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ReplyDeletethe drip noise works really well and you put it all together really well, but i think you shopuld involve the speakers in it more as its not really in it at all even though the film is about them, well done :)
ReplyDeleteI liked your use of establishing shots at the beginning and the speaker shots. The tap noise was very effective as well. I would maybe cut down the first shot of the bedroom just a little as it seems a little too long, but other than that timing was done well.
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